Also, make sure the story flows smoothly, connecting the places. Include sensory details—sights, sounds, smells. Ensure Peter's emotions change from the start to the end. Maybe starts with a desire to escape, finds more than expected in the warmth of the people and the environment.
Also, make sure the story flows smoothly, connecting the places. Include sensory details—sights, sounds, smells. Ensure Peter's emotions change from the start to the end. Maybe starts with a desire to escape, finds more than expected in the warmth of the people and the environment.